Blink, you said good bye,
I was eager to close eyes,
See you in sweet dreams!
I was eager to close eyes,
See you in sweet dreams!
- Haiku Heights - Day 1 : #113 : EAGER
- I got couple of Sweet friends who speak Spanish and Portuguese, so I thought to translate the lines and writing them too so that it would be easy for them to go through.
In Spanish:
Blink y dijo adiós,
Yo estaba ansioso por cerrar mi ojo,
Nos vemos en los sueños otra vez!
In Portuguese:
Pisque e você disse adeus,
Eu estava ansioso para fechar meus olhos,
Vemo-nos em sonhos de novo!
Rachana...it's a lovely thought..do have a relook for syllable count..for haiku...:)
ReplyDeleteThankyou :) Yes I have rechecked the syllables in the word count counter, it looks to me fine..5-7-5 , let me know if you see something different!
DeleteBeautiful haiku! But syllables are 6-8-6 :)
ReplyDeletesee you in dreams again - I love that! It is exciting and beautiful!
ReplyDeleteNicely done Rachana.
ReplyDeleteNamaste
lovely message ~ too many syllables ~ thanks, namaste, ^_^
ReplyDeletewow...that's nice translating it Rach...:)
ReplyDeletedreams...dreams...dreams...:))
very nice take my dear!
Those we love can leave in the blink of an eye...but we can always dream them back into our presence...
ReplyDeleteEager Wildflower
hope it was a good dream
ReplyDeletefour eager senryu
That is very beautiful, Rach! :) Loved the take.
ReplyDeletebeautiful.........................!
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